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Treatment STOP MOTION

Stop Motion Pitch

Stop Motion Questionnaire

After presenting my stop motion to my class i handed out this questionnaire ...                                                                                                                                                                                                                              

Q1. Was the length of the stop motion appropriate? If NOT please explain how it could Have been improved.

 

 Q2. Was there a clear story line? If NOT please explain how it could have been improved.

Q3. Any other improvements that could have been made?

Q4. Do you feel that the STOP MOTION characters were detailed ? If NOT what tips could you give

Q5. Was the soundtrack effective? If NOT what tips could you give

Reflection / Evaluation

 After completing my graphic narrative i am going to reflect and evaluate what can be improved...                                                                                                                                                                              NARRATIVE STRUCTURE                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                I went for a simple graphic narrative structure , the first stage i described the main participants, the second stage i introduced the problem and other complications in the situation which has an effect on the main character.The third stage is a resolution to the problem however i added a plot twist making the structure a multi-strand narrative with a closed structure.The fourth stage is the denouement , the aftermath of the response that makes clear the success , partial success or non-success of the situation.                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                         COMPONENTS                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                           The comic opens with the main character Russ laying on the beach on his island , he is then disturbed by a very loud crashing noise he goes to check it out and to his surprise he sees hundreds of journalist boarding the island. The conflict within the comic is very extreme , a lot of blood and gore is included for this reason i have made the target audience 16+. The conflict all begins once the journalist begin deforestation to Russ island. The journalist believed to resolve this situation they would call in a scientist who would be able to find this super beings weakness little did they know that the scientist was the one who brought this alien to Earth. The climax built when the fight for the island began and escalated once it was announced that the scientist  knew Russ . The death of the scientist intensified the climax.                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                      Here is my reflection and evaluation of my graphic narrative called "BOY O BOY ".

Considerations

Target Audience 

When creating my graphic narrative there were a number of things i had to take in to consideration the target audience being one. As i have created my own graphic narrative and not adapted a storyline from an existing i have my own target audience. Due to my graphic narrative containing a lot of violence and such a serious story line i have made my target audience 16+ as it contains adult content that may be deemed unsuitable for minors. Content such as swearing , blood and gore will be included within this serious graphic narrative. I aim to achieve a very intense serious story line that  leave the audience wanting more. 

Length 

When creating my graphic narrative another thing i would have to take in to consideration is the length of the story line . The reason for this is so its not too long or too short. the perfect  length i believe is two pages this would allow me to give a detailed story without it being too long. Short sentences will be used when describing scenes and for dialogue. Making it simple and quick when my audience are reading the graphic narrative.

Digital / Paper 

When creating my graphic narrative i had to take in to consideration which platform i wanted to produce it on whether is was using a programme such asphotoshop , or simply drawing it out. Although i am not the best artist i believed it would be easier to draw my graphic narrative and simply colour it in. This also allowed me to add small detail that would be hard to achieve on a computer programme . Drawing also allowed me to explore without having to repeat steps.

Health and Safety

HEALTH AND SAFETY IN A GRAPHIC NARRATIVE STUDIO 

In this post i will be researching health and safety requirements/regulations about producing graphic narratives in a professional setting such as a studio.


Here are some hazards and potential harm that could come in a professional graphic design studio.

Manual Tasks - Muscular strain from overexertion movement this could occur when drawing.

Gravity - Falling objects , Slips and trips can cause bodily harm or death

Electricity - This could be a fire hazard and it is a source of ignition it could also cause shock , burns or death electrocution .

Extreme Temperatures - Due from the lighting this is a a heat source and can cause a fire .

Knowing all the hazard symbols is a key skills so you are able to identify a hazard.





All equipment within the study will go under a Equipment Safety Check . To maintain safe environment equipment need to be maintained on a regular  basis. Once they have gone through the safety check they will be labeled and dated for the next check up.


FROM THIS SOURCE : http://visualartists.ie/the-manual-a-survival-guide-for-visual-artists/protecting-yourself/health-and-safety-in-the-studio/

I FOUND A RSK ASSMEN THAT SHOULD BE CARRIED OUT IN A PROFESSIONAL STUDIO TO PREVENT ANY TYPE OF DANGER THAT COULD OCCUR


Risk AssessmentA risk assessment identifies the hazards in your workplace and evaluates the risks posed by these hazards. In order to fully comprehend the language of the legislation and to be able to draw up a risk assessment, it is helpful to understand the common terms used throughout – hazard, harm and risk.

• A Hazard can be defined as anything that has the potential to cause physical injury or damage to health, the environment or to property.

• Harm is the adverse effect on an individual that may result from exposure to a hazard

• A Risk is a measure of the probability of harm being caused and the severity of that harm.

Carrying Out a Risk Assessment
The Health and Safety Authority provides a systematic guide to carrying out a risk assessment.
* Analyse your studio or workplace. This may involve listing all the activities carried out in your studio, drawing up a diagram of your space and mapping the location of equipment such as computers, sinks, radiators, shelving, kilns etc

* Identify the hazards associated with your work activities. For example, electrical hazards associated with untrunked cables which may cause tripping or falling, chemical hazards associated with toxic materials, hazards that are associated with stone work – dust inhalation for example. Textile dyes are particularly hazardous to skin and photochemicals used by photographers are associated with skin and respiratory diseases. Some hazards may not seem so obvious such as unsecured shelving, the glare from PC monitors, for example, but even the chair that you sit on, if incorrectly adjusted, can cause back injury.

* Rate the risk level associated with each hazard. To do this you need to evaluate the likelihood that injury might occur and the extent or severity of the injury. This assessment of risk is a question of judgement – you yourself must form an opinion. If you are unsure of the risk associated with a particular piece of equipment or chemical; it is up to you to find out by contacting the manufacturer or reading the label or safety manual.

Contemporary Genres / Forms Case Study ( STOP MOTION ANIMATION )

WALLACE AND GROMIT CASE STUDY  

Genre	Clay animation Comedy Adventure Suspense
Written by	Bob Baker Nick Park Steve Box Mark Burton
Directed by	Nick Park Steve Box Merlin Crossingham
Starring	Peter Sallis (1990–2010) Ben Whitehead (2009, 2011–2013)
Theme music composer	Julian Nott
Opening theme	"Wallace and Gromit"
Composer(s)	Julian Nott
Country of origin	United Kingdom

While carrying out this case study i found out that the characters Wallace and Gromit were crafted out of plasticine. This allow the creators to use sculpting tools for details and move the characters when taking shots to create the stop motion.


Wallace and Gromit is a British clay animation comedy series created by Nick of Aardman Animations. The series consists of four short films and a feature length film.

MCCOYS TV ADVERT 

   
The crisp company  Mccoys created a stop motion advert , although it is crisp from the advert I was able to spot characteristics that the director has given to packet with a voice of a grown man. The animation is a perfect duration of 41 seconds. In this short clip you are able to identify the bad and good characters, the crisp packet will not let the bad crisp enter the packet showing the quality of Mccoys. The sound effects of the crisp packet crunching helps create effect.

KUBO AND THE TWO STRINGS  TRAILER

 source: https://www.wired.com/2016/08/art-of-kubo-video/



Kubo follows the fantastical quest of a young boy in ancient Japan an ambitious move for the stop-motion studio. Not only did Laika take on the always tricky challenge of animating water, the team also had to integrate that with practical puppets and sets.

Epic and action-packed, Kubo and the Two Strings is an animated adventure movie with human and animal characters, magic, monsters, and an emotional family story at its core. And Laika, the studio behind the film, made it entirely using 3-D-printed puppets and the latest CG.

And the sweeping story, about a boy on a quest, is full of the unusual. The biggest challenge of making Kubo, says producer Arianne Sutner, "is the sheer scope of it." Unlike the studio’s previous films, this one is almost all exteriors and many outdoor locations, from the opening scene in the boat to the public square, into the woods, and under the sea. “It’s a big, exterior, road movie,” says Sutner. “An outdoor adventure with David Lean proportions. And we wanted it to be really cinematic, even in stop-motion animation on